Revisions

I read Stephen Leslie's piece and I really liked it. The only thing I noticed that seemed a bit off was that it had a repatitive touch to it when he kept mentioning the gangs. If this is an important part of the piece then it doesnt have to be taken out cause the repepitiveness of the gang mentions make them seem important like they are always on the main characters mind. The things about the water heaters is so creative .  T"he big prize is the hot water heater.  If it is full it gives me enough water for months" who would've ever thought to bring this up in a piece. It such an out there thing it's almost hard to believe someone would just think of that in their spare time. It seems pretty cool.